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I start, but I begin to faulter
catching myself on cliffs of wind chapped lips
gnawing uncertainty with white spears

                                                    (oh native tongue)
what's spinning you?

The bastard child that thinks I'm a yo-yo.



I begin again, only to fall into
the same too big for you shoes, same glazed (aspartame laced) over smile,
and you. you are... a loss of anything to say



                                                              (lost in the silence, i call)

I wander through cloud parties and sun happenings
flying to the fro
ever backwards, ever forward on tippy toes




here is where, here is where



so much for wishful thinking. and wishes, wishes on every ____,
every _____, every time. you can get what you never really should have wanted.

And when he said no, it meant more. And when she said stop, it meant yes.


There is a day when. Whenever when.



I want to peel my gums back and bleed my teeth out of my mouth. Enconsced between a tremor and a scream, I want to weave you little figures in my hair and perform a reenactment of a collision,
of a thunder crash crash.

Just so you know, you know?


here is where we fall


Oh the way your words shine bright in my ears, mellifluous melodies playing hard against my skin, your mouth instruments blur love into something beautiful. (Something worth keeping, something worth breaking)

You will care? You will dismiss?


I'm in love with your accidental smile and your car crash laugh; we're heading for the emergency room.

I don't want to rain rain down my fire hydrant eyes down on you.


Hang over hips dizzy you into shoes. Place your feet right; you'll win.



You. Spinning me haphazardly, with sporadic rests of sunshine and pretty cloud faces so I can catch my breath and smile.


Quarry calls.
Title = If you keep your eyes closed you won't see the beauty in the wreckage.


This is for ~Dancing-Naked I asked her to write a poem:
one about breathing someones skin in like buttermilk, heart tinglings like sherbet in your chest and smiles that make the world go 'round in dizzy sway, where your feet don't touch anything but sky and ground is all feeling caught in a swirl of touching colours and smelling your voice.

Hers is far prettier than this, but this is an amalgamation of things that I commented to her or babbled to her in various forms, that she asked to be poemed and plus, kind of like milk plus.

:heart:

Oh, and haha aspartame.


AND I wrote this in a comment to the darling *sleepyfeet "rain rain your fire hydrant eyes down on yourself"
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infidelity Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2007
"Oh the way your words shine bright in my ears, mellifluous melodies playing hard against my skin, your mouth instruments blur love into something beautiful. (Something worth keeping, something worth breaking)"

Absolutely, ridiculously gorgeous. This whole peice is just amazingly well written and enchanting.

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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2007
:blushes: Wow, thank you so much for the ridiculously beautiful compliment! :heart:
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clockworkparadox Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2007
I have a pair of shoes that I graffitied with sharpies awhile ago. Along one side is written "what's spinning you tonight?"

I love this enter section, except for the part with too many Ms: "Oh the way your words shine bright in my ears, mellifluous melodies playing hard against my skin, your mouth instruments blur love into something beautiful. (Something worth keeping, something worth breaking)"

and "car crash laugh" is wonderful.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2007
Thank you so much darling :hug:

Do you have pictures of these shoes? :D
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clockworkparadox Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2007
no but someday I will.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2007
I hope you'll show me them when you do :D
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Forbsie Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
Wonderful!
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2007
Thank you ! :D
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profaine Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2007
<33 That's realllly good. I really gotta start reading more of your stuff. You're a great Poet :)
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2007
Woah, thank you so much! :hug:
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enchanted-lullaby Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2007
(phenyl)a(lanine) :giggle: love it as per usual. per say per chance ho hum :highfive:
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2007
Oh I love you for saying that :smooch: add(it)i'ves! :heart: thank you for the favourite prettifulness!
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enchanted-lullaby Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2007
and i love sugah :D always welcome you are mah dear :kiss:
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the-rage-of-a-saint Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2007
I thought no one else had ever felt like this-

"I want to peel my gums back and bleed my teeth out of my mouth."

I loved the poem. Thanx for a brilliant read! cheers
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2007
Thank you so much.

Sometimes you just feel so violent, whether it is directed inwardly or outwardly, sometimes you just need to smash things, burn things. Pull your teeth out, cut your hair off...
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mesmeric-revelation Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2007
lovecrisis and sedimentary stole my favorite part. overall i love it as well:D
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2007
Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it :D
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mesmeric-revelation Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007
you're welcome:D
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2007  Student Writer
"I'm in love with your accidental smile and your car crash laugh; we're heading for the emergency room.

I don't want to rain rain down my fire hydrant eyes down on you.


Hang over hips dizzy you into shoes. Place your feet right; you'll win.



You. Spinning me haphazardly, with sporadic rests of sunshine and pretty cloud faces so I can catch my breath and smile."

Yes, I virtually copy and pasted every line you just wrote. But I'm THAT in love with it.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2007
:blushes::heart: Thank you so much, darling one. :hug:
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sedimentary Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2007
MY favourite part. stealer.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2007
hehe you win with the u. :D
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sedimentary Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2007
i win the interbloggggggggg
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2007
no. you win spam :spam: see, isn't that deliciously fake?
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sedimentary Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2007
SPAMBURGER SPAMBURGER
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2007
:( i can feel my arteries clogging up already.
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Lovecrisis Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2007
"I want to peel my gums back and bleed my teeth out of my mouth. Enconsced between a tremor and a scream, I want to weave you little figures in my hair and perform a reenactment of a collision,
of a thunder crash crash."

My favorite part. :clap:

:heart:
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2007
Thank you :)
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