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and i told her to wait one hour and a day, but she was too impatient.
instead, she stayed for a year and a week
and wept bitterly at her crying shoes.


i said, 'dont cry for your feet,
they only follow your voice
and you make the choice to lead them astray'


she bit cheeks of an apple, and left me the core
i told her no more and she took back hello
ate up all my heart, drank all my love juice. spat all the pips out. the whore.


she dallied past non sequiturs and fell victim to gullibility,
her paranoia blinding her light. she couldnt see, couldnt hear, nor realise
what was so blatantly latent.


i asked her what it meant to let the sky fall around you
and she said it has everything to do with looking up
always looking back with more to do than smile. she sighed


i told her, 'your knees creak with uncertainty
because you never found the time to decide,'
she replied with 'but i dont even like apples'


'dont fall victim to yourself,' and she laughed
and cried and screamed and fell over herself all giddy and serene
retorting, 'you just described life.'
it seems I was put into a very light puff pastry kind of a mood (could not post hours ago because of dA unavailabilities).
on second thoughts this poem is too scrappy. but then i got threatened with minusing keratin. so i heeded, aye.
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im sorry i thought w(i)e couldve been happy. im sorry i was so wrong.

im trying to find a frequency for my heart, trying to sift through the static with sticky fingers

trying to decide, you know?
sitting on the edge dipping my toes in boiling hot water, daring myself to plunge. daring myself to submerge in my own melting skin. dropping lumps of cleanliness down to bare flesh and band-aid bloody bones
with little etchings of alone
"just keep dreaming"

i am wondering what it is like to let go.
wondering when it really is enough. wondering why i let myself strip down the stabilities too late,
only when i release they are only nooses and chains and guilts that i should not let honour my own self-determined death sentence.

what am i doing really?

im letting myself get swallowed up by my own self-sabotage.

disguising it as other people doesnt change the fact that choice still exists.

still exists.

why doesnt repetition ever work for me?

("i always give myself very good advice, but i very seldom follow it")
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ninjavampireGBP Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
This is good =)
Not scrappy. Whoever threatened you had good reason.
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mesmeric-revelation Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2007
shoshoshoshoshosho wonderfulll

:heart::heart::cookie:
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2007
oh cookie! :D

thank you so much loveliness! :hug: :heart:
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mesmeric-revelation Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2007
hehe you're welcome:hug:
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Nightgazer27913 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2007
i really love this part!!!

"i asked her what it meant to let the sky fall around you
and she said it has everything to do with looking up
always looking back with more to do than smile. she sighed"

<3 :] love this so much!!!!!!!!!!!!
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2007
Thank you so much darling! :hug:
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EvilNNasty129 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2007
gawd this is beautiful :heart:
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2007
thank you so much darling! :hug:
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SinfulRose Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2007
i agree baby, this is amazing, when i read it i was lost for words :heart:
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2007
wow, thank you! :D
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Interpolny Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2007
beautiful beautiful poem... I also love the description, it fits so well.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2007
thank you so much ! :D
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2007  Student Writer
Wow. This is like literary gloop.

Literary gloop with gloop sprinkles and gloop sauce.

Gah.
:heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart:
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2007
do you realise that's like saying ground up augustus gloop hehehe cannibals'r'us! totally need to trademark that hehe

thank you so much lovely! :heart:
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2007  Student Writer
Augustus, darling. I do love that skin you're in.

Very tender.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2007
Oh! Such... soft... skin. Hmmm...
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2007  Student Writer
:spork:

:D
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2007
everything goes well with spork.
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2007  Student Writer
Gloop on a spork.

It just sounds delicious.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2007
haha i like sporks, should be put on a flag some place.
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sedimentary Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2007
unscrap this post haste, or i shall cut little cuts in the middle of your every nail so they always hurt and catch on things.

i said, 'dont cry for your feet,
they only follow your voice
and you make the choice to lead them astray'

that is zoozoowawadiggy.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2007
you would cut my every nail with ouchy forever hurts? heeeee now that's what you call a threat.

thank you as always, Chrissy :heart:

(like up your ziggy with a waa waa brush?)
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