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you are an hour
sixty minutes of sixty tickings

   in this hour is every word
   youve ever said

i have an old wrist watch my father gave me
i say old, because five years is a long time when it is a quart of your life.

i use it to count you.

staring at the straight lines and reflecting the tubed light into a dancing circle on the wall
a spotlight for an ant
i imagine a woven straw hat and cane

   and dancing,

      there was always dancing wasnt there?
      there was, but it was never us that were dancing. its just a configuration.

   you know, of talk.

something we forgot all about.
       perhaps.

   perhaps.

       perhaps it wasnt forgetfulness but forced ignorance.

  you know, being stubborn, like stains you can never get out in the morning.

      real light shows up all the flaws.

  a shuffle, a pirouette, a rhythm of powerfully walking away.


i have an old watch, that my father gave me
i say old, because it no longer tells the time.

   it memorised time. it doesnt move.
      my brother told me all i had to do was keep moving.
         it would start up again.
           but i cant keep moving, with a dead watch.
             no tickings, no tickings.
               i use it to count you.

i have an old watch, that my father gave me
i say old, because thats what you say when things are broken.
Maybe I should have expanded on the idea a bit more. Still have to type up more of the story though.

Hmmm.

Watch still don't work.
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Peaceful-Violence Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2007   Writer
There's just something that gets at me.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2007
Thanks for the favourite :)
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kittytsukasa Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2007  Student
For some reason, I like broken watches. I like what you did with the repeating and changing of your fathers watch.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2007
=) i have a drawerful of old dead watches at my parents house =)
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kittytsukasa Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2007  Student
Sweet, I'd love those. I love watches.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2007
heh now youve made me one to get them. =)
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kittytsukasa Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2007  Student
Then do so. ^^
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2007
one? woah im so not awake. hahaha want.

:giggle:
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I make a point of only wearing watches if they are broken. I like wearing more than one at a time, and all of them stuck on different meaningless moments.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2007
Oh! This is what I used to do. =D
I have a watch that my grandmother gave me, that never worked.
A watch that my father gave me that now doesnt work-subject matter.
And another watch that my friend gave me that had no watch face in it and blood stains. I used to wear them all at once.
But now I haven't got the time.

I also have a drawerful of children's watches at my parent's house. I should make an artwork of watches. All broken. Could be fun. heh
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persistanceofmemory Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2007
Wow. I love it.

I love the repetition of the old watch.
"a shuffle, a pirouette, a rhythm of powerfully walking away" and for some reason that line really strikes me, don't know why.

Yeah... you've really impressed me with this piece.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2007
Thank you very muchly much! For the favourite and the kind words. I'm happy you like the line, to be honest with you, I don't really. =)
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Xandu-San Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2007  Student General Artist
oo I love it

as usual

:D
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2007
=D thank you very much heh
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ervinai Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2007
This is good :) It progresses :)
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2007
thank you very much =)
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sedimentary Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2007
you are good. that is all.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2007
Thank you Chrissy =)

but i still have an old watch that doesnt tell the time.
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sedimentary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2007
the best kind.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2007
=) i have three.

hah
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BubbleRoseyPosey Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2007
I love this. *hits favorite button* :ninja:
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2007
Ninja! I see you!

Thank you very much =D
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BubbleRoseyPosey Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2007
You are welcome.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2007
=)
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