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i catch little insects with my fingers
it makes me feel so powerful
and having become god in your eyes, also -
i quit:
take your sorrys with me,


punch in,
shuffle through turnstiles,
take the line closest to the door.


i speak erratic, tongue sore
explaining away this
knotted anchor

he said it was "very zen"
to undo, unravel,
unrelentingly -

of course i cringed.


having had your breath taken
you have the gall
to ask for
it back.
it must make you feel so powerful, inverting god, playing with smaller organised minds.
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2010  Student Writer
incredible diction, imagery, flow.
I love it. :heart:
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mesmeric-revelation Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010
Ohhhhhgeeeeeee.

having had your breath taken
you have the gall
to ask for
it back.

and having become god in your eyes, also -
i quit:


Beautiful wrappings of words. Unexpected words everywhere.
You are always my favorite writer all over this site :heart:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010
Whoa.. I adore the title with this! It adds another level of intrigue, for sure!
Playing God is such an interesting concept.. I like the idea of it in a relationship situation.
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