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how come perfection could be the smile of apology you made when you were always late

how come perfection could be
                                  could be
                                        would be
                                               cant be
                                                          was?
                                                          was.
                                                          wasnt.
                                                          was it?

   ricocheting back
          and forth
  velocity isnt lost each time
       the bounce has changed
   direction

          there arent enough sides inside
                my skull to play any proper games

        how come perfection is this perfect good bye
     splitting my sides
undoing
undone
   making me up from memory

       how come perfection is not me you
you me
       how come perfection isnt coming
                                                   going
       how come perfection is this goodbye

       how come perfection is all of these perfect lies

  how come
  how come

                                          how come its all so perfect.
perfect.

"ill live through you and make you what i never was if youre the best then maybe so am i compared to him compared to her im doing this for your own damned good youll make up for what i blew whats the problem why are you crying?"

random lyrics always bunch up in my head.

what is this, what is perfection?

a perfect head hold. a perfect encasement.

a box to place my weary head,
a box is all thats left,
a box is where my heart is
what my heart is
an empty box, left on a forgotten shelf.


drip all of my words someplace else.
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner May 15, 2007  Student Writer
I love that song.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner May 15, 2007
=D me too :hug:
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kittytsukasa Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2007  Student
I believe perfection is something we create ourselves.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2007
I don't believe in perfection, and yet i do, and i dont. =)
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kittytsukasa Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2007  Student
Hmmm, I believe in coming as close to perfection as possible. It's a character flaw I'm told.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2007
haha i dont believe in anything =)
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phreakyone Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2007
i like
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2007
thank you =)
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Forbsie Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
I love the way it makes me think. If that makes any sense at all. :dygel: Anyway, I like it.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2007
heh thank you very much, and for the odd looking emoticon =D
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sedimentary Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
i hate perfect.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
exactly so. exactly what i mean, exactttt-ly
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sedimentary Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
indeed.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
heh spanks for the fave pumpkin tits =D
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sedimentary Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
fave yourself.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
i cant there is no button for it. hahah and its also conceited.
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sedimentary Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
be awesome if you could watch yourself.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
you could if you set up another account
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unexplored-beauty Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
it made perfect sense to me...in my head...haha i'd never be able to explain it though! but that's the beauty, understanding it without understanding the understanding lol. -erin
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
i know =)

thats what i love about language, the complete absurdity that these sounds and scribblings mean a thing at all.

body language is much better though, and eyes are much better tools than words. =)

oh! and thank you very much for the fave erin!
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enchanted-lullaby Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
even though there is no structure it is very well structured! i like the randomness of it as it depicts exactly the way the thoughts are floating through your mind coming and going neither here nor there. i do love the way you say it :#1:
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
heh with the title i meant the way i say 'perfect', just the way it sounds, i dont know, i like it. but there i am again; i get obsessed with the sounds of words, just as much as meaning.

but woohoo for the foam hand! and you loving the way i say it =)
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enchanted-lullaby Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
ohhhhhhhhhh ok i hadn't really given much thought to 'perfect' before. what are your thoughts on insouciant?

you sound very much like me though, i love all the foibles of the english language and rolling words around in my mouth. quite amusing and entertaining!
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
indeed! my best friend is my giant OED =D

insouciant is lovely. i love all those weird transplantables.
i love words, have many a book on weird and archaic words.
i also seem to drop a few archaic words here and there. =)
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enchanted-lullaby Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
well never stop you are quirky and that is perfect!
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2007
heh, as are you, and thank you. =D
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Xandu-San Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007  Student General Artist
I like it...and I like the sort of idea I get from it...but I'm not sure I understand it too well...

but still...the layout and the the way the words are placed do catch the eye... :)
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2007
thank you very much =)

this is a few random thoughts, seems ive gone back to one of my obsessions for a time.

just caught up in meanings of words and their inability to express reality. heh im making no sense. but thanks. =)
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Xandu-San Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2007  Student General Artist
ah right

I get the same feeling sometimea

I used to write a lot but then I got annoyed with how I couldn't express quite what I felt in words alone

so then I just took to drawing things...

and you're welcome. it was really good :)
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2007
=D thanks. oh, youre so lucky! wish i could draw, i take to sculpting things out of things. =)
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Xandu-San Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2007  Student General Artist
ah sculpting

I can't do it to save my life lol

I mean, I can do casts, but that's not like, sculpting sculpting

but that's as far as it goes :p


but thank you hun :)

I just draw what I see in my head. Scares me sometimes...hehe
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2007
hehe =D i just write whats in my head, destroys me sometimes =)
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