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the sleepy storm of your aeroplane fingers
hurricaning gentle rushes along the tips of my ear flesh--
no, i did not say stop


as a child in your arms, I wish for more wishes


too few are the moments we glide beneath our eye sheets
tucking our tears into slippery sleep
when does wait turn into savour?



jester flowers dance jangly yellow beneath my feet and i feel
the gentle grumble of the wind's distaste through my ear pipes
along my jaw; my straining neck


a furore of bent elbows and outstretched arms tasting cloud whispers
on my cheeks, on my lips, and my hair no longer obeys the law
of gravity


is this how it is to fly? arms wicked propellers and spinning
turning running sideways centripetal;
my centre?          is where, is where?


i am your el(e)-o-c(tro)ution
you are my hard starboard.

everyone was once a smaller face to cry
Just close your eyes.... and jump.
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showna Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2007  Professional Photographer
as a child in your arms, I wish for more wishes

I like that line.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2007
thank you :)
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persistanceofmemory Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2007
i can see your words when i close my eyelids.
they dance, and slide and emote.

something to be proud of.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2007
:blushes:

Thank you so "oh my!" so much! I hope you know you've made my day, darling. :hug: :heart:
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persistanceofmemory Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2007
Well that makes me happy.
You're welcome.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2007
:hug:
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musashi2476 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2007
"ear flesh," "eye sheets," "ear pipes" . . .

astounding wordplay throughout. a definite fav.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2007
:blushes: Thank you so much! :hug:
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musashi2476 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2007
most welcome :)
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2007
:butterflytwo:
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AnotherJuliette Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2007   Writer
Such beauty [=truth] in your words...
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2007
Thank you so much pretty one :heart:
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AnotherJuliette Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2007   Writer
Only pretty when loved. :heart:
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2007
:heart:
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WabyBishi Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2007  Student Photographer
i've felt that
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2007
:heart:
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sometimes I think you might just be a genius.

other times, I know it.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2007
:heart: I'm absolutely speechless, that is far beyond a compliment and I have no clue as to what to say. :blushes: But thank you so (oh my!) so much! With kisses of moonlight on your fingers. :hug:
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Xandu-San Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007  Student General Artist
yay! the first one that I've got after only having to read it twice :D

(I can be a bit dim sometimes =p)

I really love the second and third lines of the first stanza :)


some really nice stuff here (once again)
+fave
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2007
:hug: thank you so much darling! :heart: I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
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mesmeric-revelation Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007
oooo lovely...i think this might be one of my favorites of yours now...just so much...yes....great job:D
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007
woah really? Thank you so much! :hug: :heart:
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mesmeric-revelation Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007
always welcome lovely! :hug: :heart:
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007
:D :heart:
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profaine Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007
tucking our tears into slippery sleep
when does wait turn into savour?



SOOOO goood!
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007
:hug: Thank you!
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007  Student Writer
"everyone was once a smaller face to cry"

That is a line which E.E. Cummings would be so proud of, sweetheart.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007
:blushes::heart: That is one amazing compliment, darling. Thank you :hug: so much!

That line actually started this all, I wrote it on a post-it note in the morning and lost it a few times, heh.
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007  Student Writer
See, even the post-it-note was amazed at what had been written on it.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2007
hah I wish it were. Would make a few hours hurry along faster.
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the-rage-of-a-saint Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007
Hearts cry girl! This was intoxicating. So easy to slip into, like a pair of silk boxers after a warm shower!
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007
hehe can't say I've ever had the pleasure. Thank you! :)
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sedimentary Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007
is it not propeller?
and, i closed my eyes and jumped and bruised my shin. expect a letter.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007
:( ...what're you talking about...

You didn't read the fine fine fine fine invisible print. Says I'm not liable in any way and I get to say "ner" repeatedly and dance around you when you hurt yourself.
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sedimentary Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2007
damn contracts!
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2007
hehe *ahem you also have to make me pretty t-shirts with fucked up drawings on them...
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sedimentary Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2007
yes yes. "one day"
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2007
one dayyyy it will happpppen ooooooonnnnneeeee daaaayyyyy.

better. or your shoe gets it.
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