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i'd like to seduce happiness
buy a new dress for contentedness
slut it up for ecstasy

pull down the sheets on frivolity
melt down the wax around sacrifice
excuse myself for rushing


i'd like to choreograph prayer
the build-up to the artifice
stop smiles from touching

begin the wake before the dawn
the black before the white; a pair
disbanded before a circle shared
one half realising, "i'm just another pawn."
This was a five minute prompt from ~LoveShotEyes that we were both unaware of at the time. But she liked this, and said I should post it, so here it is, in all its ugly rhyming glory.

Seducing happiness is completely her invention. Sometimes typographical errors make for lovely babbles.

:heart:

This will probably be scrapped shortly.
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:iconpersistanceofmemory:
See I read this in a rush a month ago (almost to the day) and was like, I am in the middle of essays and this needs more proper reviewage as it is pretty damn awesome.
And here I am now and I am thinking, wow this is pretty damn awesome.
I just wish I had more to say.
It is so different of you. Which I love bytheway. The ending is chilling to our previously mentioned desires, what we wouldn't give to be able to achieve the first five lines!

Beautiful darling.
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:icontwelvestep:
This makes me smile. It's adorable.
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:iconmesmeric-revelation:
WHY MUST YOU THINK BEAUTIFULS NEED SCRAPPED????


*grabs away milkshake*
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fllnthblnk Nov 22, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Whoa... I loved the last stanza. Very strong ending!
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:iconsaturnineguise:
Wow, thank you so much! :D
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LoveShotEyes Nov 22, 2007  Student Writer
See, I'm not the only one who thinks it's a good poem.

You should get back to writing, woman. Where's that kipper of mine?
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:iconsaturnineguise:
I'll show you your kipper!

(thank you darling :heart:)
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LoveShotEyes Nov 22, 2007  Student Writer
You don't need to. I've already seen it :giggle:
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:iconalecbell:
A lovely poem.

Such a pity happiness rejects or efforts at seduction, the worst and the best.

If you're going to throw your poor little poem out, I'm willing to give it a good home!

It can stay in my favourites
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:iconsaturnineguise:
heheh i think it likes it in your favourites, toasty warm :heart:
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