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will you meet me in the spaces
between our fingers

become tiny
atom-like

indivisible, but one

(and all the smaller pieces
that don't matter)


trade electrons

become
heavier
elements

----


a hollow note
crawls up
my throat

when you
depart

----


twenty minutes to dawn
(i know this because we've been here before)
in this moment, and this thing of arms and arms entwined, called embrace
this moment on soft notsosoft ground sheets

this look

it's the same
and in this moment

this moment is again

----



and your voices
singing as the past
ricocheting off
ceilings and walls
that do not house me
anymore, i hear you
strum afar
voices lamenting
as one.

your mother


----


when i
those
it's like
but i
that
i can't
what did
can you
know that
wait

----



you are farther away
when i am with you

than when we are
so far apart

----


i do not have a traditional clock
that could tick away the night
in even tones
to focus on
when i'm trying my hardest not to be awake

----

i only have digitalisations left
for metaphors

----

and i know
no matter what colours
what sounds
and what repetitions
available
i will never
be able
to run away
from your name

----


there is a fear
that smells
suspiciously
like hope


----


it's time the future
gave up


----


is it?

or is my mind
just trying
too hard

----


did i believe it was you
in those words

perhaps that wasn't
what mattered

----

the insides
of a flower
feels like
the need
to scream

----

if i was walking
and dropped these bus tickets
by accident

i wonder who would pick them up
(if at all)

i wonder what their shoes look like
how soft their fingers are

i wonder the thoughts they'd be thinking
when they read mine

----


i slipped once
grasped a hand
to stop from falling

easiest way to lose
a few years

----


i wasn't
and you knew it


----



the cold seems alive
when i open my eyes
and forget the warmth
is missing


----


sometimes there's a mask;
sometimes a ball
with whirlwind skirts
and shining black shoes
mist covered eyes
and the most ridiculous of costumes

seems to be mine
title = (truth)


[these are many little mini poems that were all written one after the other]


free-flow-fall thoughts

catchcatch
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gracelally Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
i agree with whoever said some of them seem to mix and match with each other.
it's nice. there are some really beautiful lines here. c:
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passionx111 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful. <3
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Atropaean Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2010
nice work. Great intro line...and becoming heaviet elements was my fav line here
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londonrey Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010
I really love this!
Even though these are obviously separate, they share a sort of wary hopeful tone that is golden! ^_^ I especially love
"when i
those
it's like
but i
that
i can't
what did
can you
know that
wait"

My brain made perfect sense of that. ^_^
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010
I suppose they share a similar tone as they were written one after the other.

I'm actually quite glad that you liked that fragment - in my mind it was mimicking a telephone conversation with someone who eats your words up and says them back to you before you've even had the chance to say them.

Thank you :heart:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010
Ooooh, maybe it's because I've had so many conversations like that that I understood. ;) You're so welcome!
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010
:giggle: :heart:
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groundzero13 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2010
this is beautiful, hun. i love it! :)
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tairngir Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2009  Student Writer
Beautiful. Well done :)
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y0urstalker Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
oh my. your heart. it's lovely!
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thanxturkey Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2008
I really love this. I feel many of the things described in these poems right now... It's kind of nice and consoling to read it. ((:
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murdersdawn Featured By Owner May 10, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
In a word spectacular. I'm awed <3
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IrishHippiePoet Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2008
Each disjointed piece brings it's individual beauty to a stunning collective.

I love this.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2008
Thank you so much, I think the fragments fit together haphazardly to construct a whole, full of holes. Which I prefer to perfection.

Thank you for the kind words.

:heart:
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RakistangNars Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2008
this is amazing! :) good work :)
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2008
thank you so much!

:heart:
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RakistangNars Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2008
you are welcome :)
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rchelsea2005 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Although I don't particularly think some of them flow beautifully together, I do think as individual poems they are beautiful.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2008
thank you, and i do think the same thing, they were never really supposed to be one whole. but i did not want so many individual deviations. so they are a set of a moment. incongruous, as most still-frames within a moment are.


haha i love your comment signature. one of my favourite x-files quotes is:

Mulder (to Eugene Victor Tooms): Excuse me, have you seen my dog? His name is Heinrich, he's a Norwegian elk hound, I use him to hunt moose.
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rchelsea2005 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:) Thank you for that explanation.

Hee, I <3 TLG.

Hah XD that is a great one. You excited for the sequel? July 25th!
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upsidedownmartyr Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2007
Ahh yeah that's the stuff. I realized, that there has been something missing.. I've been writing poetry a good bit but it's been a long time since I've read any. This is good. It's like.. Flossing.. but for my brain.. I'm glad to know that your still the same poetry babbling Australian lilly that I visited oh so long ago. Give my page a drop by and check out some of my new stuff.
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Demur Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2007  Professional Artist
how fun =)
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2007
hehe babble usually is
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FictionalSoul Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2007  Student General Artist
"and the most ridiculous of costumes

seems to be mine"

Even though the entire piece of writing itself is fabulous, I think it was worth reading the entire poem (or poems) just to see those last lines.

=) Beautiful!
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2007
thank you (:
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White-Rabbit-75 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
LOVE *dies*

All of it is so beautiful... I think my favourite though, was
"there is a fear
that smells
suspiciously
like hope".

You're amazing ^.^
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2007
:blushes: i tell you i am not, and offer you little flowerpots :flowerpot::flowerpot::flowerpot:

thank you :hug:
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Dancing-Naked Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2007   General Artist
[link]
Feature
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2007
:heart::heart::heart:
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Dancing-Naked Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2007   General Artist
:love:
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Forbsie Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
Lovely piece
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2007
thank you :heart:
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meeden Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2007
a wonderful collection of flowing words - arranged to capture the reader - amazingly! :butterfly:
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2007
thank you so much :heart:
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kLiT-sHy Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2007
dear, if u submit each as one deviation---
I AM GOING TO FAVE all of them. :heart:
we have this mutual adoration for each other. :hug:

"i slipped once
grasped a hand
to stop from falling

easiest way to lose
a few years"

this is my favorite stanza and i dunno why. =)
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2007
i usually don't know why i love things other than i love them hehe but i'm obnoxious and stubborn like that :giggle:

and oh! you are so lovely, you are! :hug: this mutual adoration sounds delicious :heart:
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musashi2476 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2007
I love these little poetic snippets.
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musashi2476 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2007
welcome :)
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2007
Thank you so much :)
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enchanted-lullaby Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2007
finger knots and love knots are the best kind. :heart::blowkiss::heart:
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2007
oh you know, i know you do :hug: :heart:
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mesmeric-revelation Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2007
[link].

OH.

the insides
of a flower
feels like
the need
to scream


these are the most wonderful of thoughts...gah...a few of these made me teary nostalgic....neverneverkneever stop writing, or i will hunt you down, and make him :achfoo: kick you in the spork.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2007
teary! my dear sporky! :hug:

hahah i think i might just to see that hilarity eventuate. :giggle:
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mesmeric-revelation Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2007
yes! they touched my spork! :glomp:


haha. don't tempt him. it hurts.

*lifts pants leg up to reveal a prosthetic leg*
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2007
:( you have a prosthetic leg 'cause of me?
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mesmeric-revelation Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2007
no.

see, one day, i made him quite angry. it was over an english muffin and two rusted nails...i don't want to get into the details, but he then decided to kick me in the shin.

so don't make him mad. tis a warning :sherlock:
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2007
:ohnoes: but i had this gag all planned out i had a pitchfork, some butter and a whole lot of buttons.
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mesmeric-revelation Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2007
well go for it. just makes sure he doesn't know it is you.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2007
:D oh, don't worry, i have many a disguise
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mesmeric-revelation Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2007
gah that link is not meant to be a link.

it is supposed to say:

oh. oh. oh. oh.

damn confused computer.
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