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the morning came in, thick as honey, studded with beestingers of shadows; the unlight from the trees' stagnant fingertips. last night i stood under the branch sky, and picked off twigs, still green inside. they tasted of fading things, like the peeling photographs of summer-skin on your wall. and you put two fingers and two thumbs together and found me in the middle and said you wish you had your camera. you called me picturesque. and i laughed and said, if that is what i'm like, why don't you tell me what i am.
they come quiet and leave with such a racket, boisterous and petulant, with loud pouting lips unapologetically kissing my feet as i run ahead of you. the leaves, they dance underneath me all across the ground as they were once in the sky. the trunks sway their heavy limbs to a symphony of winter.
you point to your naked wrist, twice, shake it like it's broken and point to it again, hold it up to your ear and snarl. it's not too late, i say, you have to wait for the flowers to bloom. so you tuck your warmth in around the edges of your skin and say you can wait forever. yes, i said. but maybe forever's not going to wait around for you, ever think about that, tough guy?
you like to think you're all big shoulders and stern words and shouting-right. but maybe people only think that 'cause they don't get to see you cry like i do.

you big fucking baby.
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IAmPhoenixMoth Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2008
A) Once again your similes and adjectives and metaphors are beautiful. I love the part about the summer-skin best.
B) that description was so exquisite as to exceed even pricelessness.
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Therminator Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
great use of simile. many varying images, but all tie together wonderfully.

thanks for sharing.
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2008   Writer
just great!
love the tone.

xo!
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FictionalSoul Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2008  Student General Artist
picturesque is a good word, and speaking of which, this piece really paints an image in my mind. I love the thick descriptions~

and I enjoyed the artist's comment too.
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