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stringing your eyes with garlands of stars i
wish to impeach you, maybe impregnate you
with a will to breathe
(in
deep)



but what are you but an incoming breath
to me? an unapologetic zephyr gracing
my inner vineyards


ruffling the leaves with whispers


(i understand it
isn't so collapsible, and
i'm forgetting i forget
you)


but when the winds turn
you're a harlot, ruining this year's
yield of self
(importance and confidence)


and i'm understandably drinking
up
down
the vinegar left


trying to breathe in the lights
i gift you with - always


and i have only the stars
to thank,
the stars to blame.
title: 'when you wish you had(n't)'



it's been a long time, hello
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:iconchhill:
chhill Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. Simply beautiful.
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persistanceofmemory Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2009
this is beautiful. i forgot how much i enjoyed reading your writing.
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pardonM3 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2009
but what are you but an incoming breath
to me? an unapologetic zephyr gracing
my inner vineyards


ruffling the leaves with whispers



Howdy. Hope you'll sit down and stay awhile.
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justhideous Featured By Owner May 16, 2009
wont be mentioned again when its forgotten.
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tigereverskin Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2009   Writer
you make me smile.
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theklauz Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Missed you to bits.
It's nice to see such beauty again. Please don't stop.
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Sugar-On-Asphalt Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2009   Writer
Love this piece. It is powerful and beautiful and gentle and makes my heart beat hard in funny rhythms. Lovelovelove the last stanza. It made by breath catch and that has to be a good things.

Certain bits get so trapped in the imagery they are a bit ambiguous or hard to untangle and I had to reread them to make sense of them, but really a beautiful piece. Nice work.
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2009  Student Writer
You'll never lose your talent. Always so beautiful.

I miss you. I miss you painfully.
xo
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moondrunk Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2009   Writer
man, i haven't seen your writing in many moons
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That-Hippie-Kid Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2009
absolutelyfuckingexcellent.
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